I am a Year 7 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 9 and my teacher is Roya. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Hi Ruqayat I really like how you talked about the zoo, I also like how you talked about the animals. Maybe next time you can add a photo in it. By Harmony.
Kia Ora Ruqayat I really like your description of the zoo! I can see you've used personification when talking about the zoo and I find that amazing! Maybe next time, to give the readers more of an idea of what the zoo looks like, add a picture :) What was your favourite animal at the zoo ? Cheers, Roseena
Ka pai Ruqayat, this is a joyful description of the zoo. What was your favourite animal to see?
ReplyDeleteHi Ruqayat I really like how you talked about the zoo, I also like how you talked about the animals. Maybe next time you can add a photo in it. By Harmony.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Ruqayat
ReplyDeleteI really like your description of the zoo! I can see you've used personification when talking about the zoo and I find that amazing! Maybe next time, to give the readers more of an idea of what the zoo looks like, add a picture :)
What was your favourite animal at the zoo ?
Cheers,
Roseena